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    Acezon
  Tue Dec 23, 2008 10:49 am
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This will be the game mode of the story, "An Empty Present". Click here for the Game Mode.




It's been twelve years. I still haven't got a present. My parents always forget to give me one. But my brother, he always have one every Christmas. It'll be days before the Christmas. I am wishing for a present. I will be waiting for it.

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This game is about a boy named Nathan who still hasn't got a present for twelve years. It will be his thirteenth birthday on December 25. His brother, Paul always gets a present from his parents because of his parent's favoritism on Paul. Now, Nathan is waiting for a present from his parents in his coming birthday. There will be a lot of cutscenes in this game.

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It's been twelve years since Nathan hasn't got a present from his parents. He is always sad because he has nothing to play with, his brother doesn't want to play with him because he has many toys than Nathan. Even if Nathan doesn't receive presents, he still loves his brother and parents. It will be his birthday on the coming December 25. He is very excited if his parents would give him a present or not. Nathan's waiting for one.

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A glimpse in the title screen..
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Amaranth Games, LLC for Graphics

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Unencrypted Version : (Thanks to Dadevster)
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If you are going to use the music, no credits needed, just use it.
NOTE : The graphics folder is in the Data Folder, just move it.


If you are going to use the Evented Title Screen, credits goes to me...

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    Acezon
  Tue Dec 23, 2008 2:58 pm
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Updated! You can now download the game!!

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    Mesh90
  Tue Dec 23, 2008 4:08 pm
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i really enjoyed this game ^^

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    Versus
  Tue Dec 23, 2008 4:50 pm
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Thery good game and story, good job man!


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    Despain
  Tue Dec 23, 2008 8:06 pm
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how is "Aveyond 2 Graphics (Ripped)" a FEATURE

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    Twirly
  Tue Dec 23, 2008 8:22 pm
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wumpi really does love ;-; wrote:
how is "Aveyond 2 Graphics (Ripped)" a FEATURE

Not only that
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No Battles Included
Custom Message System (specifically Universal Message System)
No Menu System

How is not having something worth to be listed on a feature list? :x
Also why do the other people not consider him as part of the society?
Why do they think he is an orphan? Because he gets no presents?
Well okay then you might think he is an orphan becaus of that, but why don't they consider him as part of the society?


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    Acezon
  Thu Dec 25, 2008 5:29 am
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@Twirly
They consider them not a part of the society because he is no that friendly..
His state in his family also affects his behavior... That's why..

@wumpi really loves ;-;
I'll to delete that..

@Mesh90 and Versus
Thanks Guys!!

UPDATE:
Demo is updated because of a script problem..

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    friend
  Thu Dec 25, 2008 6:33 am
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Good story, really touching

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    Acezon
  Thu Dec 25, 2008 7:23 am
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Thanks for playing my game! I hope you liked it!

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    Reives
  Fri Dec 26, 2008 6:39 am
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I like the concept, nice a simple. Will take a look in the near future, and good luck.


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    Acezon
  Sat Dec 27, 2008 3:08 pm
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Thanks for that Reives.. I hope you'll download and play my game..^^

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    Toshi
  Sun Dec 28, 2008 6:33 am
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This sound very very sad  :cry:
I'll test it right now...
Woah, at the beginnig, this is so cruel... But later its so beautifull...
It makes me crying a lil bit...
If u want to release a german version of this too, tell me.
I will send u the translated text in a pm.

This is really really great...
Do u plan more projects like that?


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    Acezon
  Mon Dec 29, 2008 7:26 am
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I like shorts. I will obviously make many many more.
There is another short I made, but it is still in planning. Here's the link:
War. Will it end?

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    Acezon
  Thu May 07, 2009 6:25 am
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A Super Long Time that I didn't update this thread UPDATE:
I'll be making a playable version of this game..
This game itself is just the story, not the real game..


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    Acezon
  Fri May 08, 2009 11:57 am
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UPDATE:
You can now download the Story Mode!

Clicky!
(It's a RAR File, Gotta need WinRAR!)

Just wait for the Updates regarding the Game Mode!

To the Mods:
Can you please move this topic to the Completed Games thread?
The story mode is already done, I'm just finishing the Game Mode.


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    Acezon
  Sun May 10, 2009 4:38 am
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UPDATE:
Oh! An unencrypted version! I like it!!

You can download the unencrypted version of this game..

Unencrypted Version : (Thanks to Dadevster)
Clicky!
If you are going to use the music, no credits needed, just use it.
NOTE : The graphics folder is in the Data Folder, just move it.


If you are going to use the Evented Title Screen, credits goes to me...


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    Acezon
  Sun Jun 28, 2009 8:15 am
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UPDATE:
• Edited the Main Post.


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    Marc1k1
  Wed Jul 01, 2009 9:51 am
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Acezon wrote:
UPDATE:
• Edited the Main Post.


This game sounds ok, I'll download it.. if my damn internet is working tonight... :P

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    Love
  Wed Jul 01, 2009 12:07 pm
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I played this game a while ago but didn't comment. The game is nice, although I feel the story is real lacking and somewhat cliche. Also, in some parts of the game, the music isn't really fitting with the atmosphere (like the title for example-it made it sound like a dangerous dungeon game). It was pretty short, I think, but never the less, it was somewhat touching. ^^

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    Ynlraey
  Wed Jul 01, 2009 12:23 pm
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I Agree about the music, I played this a while ago too but I think the story mode was way too fast in regards to pacing and the ending was...eh ok...

10 years of no presents, at least give him special treatment or something even though the ending was specifying why it's just over the top for me or stop lying to the kid wait for next year, wait for next year, wait for next year <_<


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    gRaViJa
  Wed Jul 01, 2009 4:05 pm
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Hmm, honestly... I think this game was a little too short to really enjoy. I was getting intrested in the story when nathan tells about cecile and all, but two minutes later the story was already finished. In 5 minutes you can't create deep characters or a touching story. Don't get me wrong, i liked what you did, it was just a little too short =/

by the way: There were some minor grammatical errors to ;)


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    Acezon
  Thu Jul 02, 2009 2:53 pm
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Thanks for the comments, and oh, gRaViJa, I didn't typed the dialogues, my cousin did.

About the length of the game, the story mode is still in progress. If you want to watch the full story, stay tuned for updates!


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    arachni
  Sat Jul 04, 2009 5:10 pm
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I think it looks cute. I like the maps, the music, and it sets up a certain atmosphere. There's a simplicity to it, so you really feel it being told from Nathan's point of view -- and that is not a trivial thing to have accomplished. It's got a sad but hopeful theme.

Still, there are some things about the story that I think don't make sense.

- If he's never gotten a present in the past, why would he have any reason to believe there's any chance he'd get a present this year? I'm sure he would wish for a present, but I would expect him to argue vehemently against anyone who suggested it might be an actual possibility. No present for him is just a fact of life. So I don't buy that he's "waiting for it," unless 13 is explicitly special somehow.

- The present at the end doesn't make any sense for a 13-year-old boy. I was expecting a fancy bike or something. It doesn't come across as "the empty present" if that is what it's supposed to be, because of his conclusion. Plus, I can't imagine a mother giving that to a boy, unless she is clinically crazy (eg. schizophrenic). What does she expect the boy to do with it? (If you want to make her schizophrenic, that would be perfectly fine, but you'd want to show a lot more behaviors that tell the player that there is something terribly wrong with her.)

- Does the mother believe a costly present at the end is supposed to make up for years of no presents? (Are we supposed to believe that she does? It's not clear.) 13 years would be a long time for an adult, and for a kid, it might as well be 100. Kids live in the moment. If a young kid has a sibling and a Jan 1st birthday, and the sibling gets a Christmas present and they don't, they are going to be very upset regardless of whether they get presents on Jan 1st or not, unless they are extremely unusual psychologically. By 13 they could be a little more mature, but that's still a lot of years of being upset, especially when they are very young and haven't had enough birthdays to understand they always get presents then. Remember that part of it is just the *concept* of getting a gift, and getting it when somebody else is, expensive or not. (Kids are also not as good at intuitively understanding the monetary value of things. It's valueable to them if they are going to use it, whether the parent spent $5 or $50.) I think most kids in such a situation would be a lot happier getting $10 worth of gifts on Christmas and $10 worth on their January birthday than $0 and $20 respectively. I mean, the parent wouldn't have to tell them it's divided up that way, either, though they'll probably catch on (and accept) as they get older.

- Are you trying to imply that the mother actually cares about Nathan? Getting a present for Paul every year and *nothing* for Nathan is either out-of-touch-with-reality or just plain malice. Even the out-of-touch-with-reality possibility would make more sense if the mother got Nathan a present every year, but something that's broken or worthless to him. (Then she can make herself feel OK by telling herself that she's trying.) Favoritism without malice might be getting him a present, it's just that Paul's is always better. With no presents, you don't expect her to say, as if embarrassed, "Oh uh, for you, next year," you expect "What are you looking at you little runt?? You don't deserve a present!"

- Why hasn't Nathan gotten a present for 12 years when Paul is only 10? :)

If you're going for a happy ending where the mother cares, I think a more logical way to bring that about would be that Nathan almost dies or something, something very serious that causes her to appreciate him when she didn't all those years. Also, make sure you show the behavior that makes him an outcast. When you expand it, I'd like to see scene showing what happened with Cecille (both good times with her friendship, and the tragic accident), rather than telling it with words.


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    Acezon
  Sun Jul 05, 2009 2:06 am
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• Wow, I like you... I read it all, and it was very detailed..
Thanks, this is a very big help you gave me :))))))


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